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University education should be free to everyone, regardless of income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Expenditure on Tertiary
education
 is becoming a concerning factor for many
students
. It is often argued that no fee should be charged to
students
 for
University
 studies, despite their financial capabilities. I partially agree with
this
 statement. On the one hand, a cost
university
education
 can certainly improve the economy of the nation.
This
 is because even those who cannot afford a
university
education
, can study, compete and secure a job on the basis of it.
As a result
, both illiteracy and unemployment rates will minimize significantly.
For instance
,
due to
 the free tertiary
education
 in Finland, the poverty rate is minimalistic ,unlike other Asian countries where
university
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 is expensive and many
students
 discontinue their
education
 post-schooling.
On the other hand
, keeping tertiary
education
 eefr for all
students
 can become a threat to government funding. It means
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 a huge fund is required to run a
University
 which will be borne by the government if no fee is charged to the
students
.
As a result
, the
education
 fund will have to be enhanced by the government and other critical sectors may suffer the consequences of insufficient funds.
For instance
, the sectors like infrastructure, agriculture, and so on which require heavy funding will have to compromise when their funds will be allocated to
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 sector. In Conclusion, providing free tertiary
education
 is indeed beneficial for
students
 and the economy of the nation,
however
, it may influence the funding of other sectors as well.
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