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A longer prison term as a way of punishing those who break the law is not as good as other method. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Issues related to longer confinement as a way of punishment are frequently discussed these days. A punishing way for prisoners is not always as good as other ways in terms of longer jail periods. From my point of view, I completely agree with
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 several reasons which will be described in detail in the following paragraphs before a conclusion is reached.
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 with, the first reason to consider is that a longer prison period is not a suitable method to prevent
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 break the law and solve crimes.
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 method will lead to overcrowded in many prisons and the nation has to spend more money on caring for them as well.
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, good prisoners should have a chance to be good
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 in the future, if they feel guilty and be responsible for their doing
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 they should be released earlier.
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, another reason is that there are many procedures that encourage
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 not to break the regulations.
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, extreme punishment would be implemented for some criminal issues.
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, if
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 kill others without humanity, they must be punished severely, like poisoning punishments.
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 will be created concern for
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 who intend to break the law. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned that there are significant drawbacks if they are in prison longer in case the government wastes money for them,
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 extreme punishing methods, the method will be effective.
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, I strongly agree with
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 viewpoint since it seems to me that the advantages of
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 idea outweigh the disadvantages.
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