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Some people think that the best way to become successful in life is to get a university education, whereas others say this is no longer true. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some
people
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 are of the opinion that if they want to be successful in
life
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, they had better get a
university
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education
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,
while
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 Some segments of society reckon it would not be
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 benefits to succeed in
life
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. As far as I am concerned, effective
education
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 in
universities
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prepare
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prepares
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 individuals for a bright future and
guarantee
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guarantees
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 professional qualifications. To embark on, getting experience or doing something you like can help you become
professional
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a professional
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 rather than having academic degrees. Many young
people
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 want to start earning money as soon as possible. In
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 way,
people
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 have numerous options for finances.
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,
students
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 have a choice
to
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of
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 admission
in
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to
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 some institutions
and
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that
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 emphasise
on
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apply
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practical knowledge and
duration
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the duration
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 of some courses have only one year after that they can try
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different companies
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 their
skills
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.
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 may lead to promotions and a successful career.
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, some
people
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 have more work experience, software
skills
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such
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 as leadership
skills
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 and other interpersonal
skills
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 that will
also
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 be beneficial in
people
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's careers as some companies hire based on their confidence level and soft
skills
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 and provide scholarships to the
students
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. A
University
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 is a place where “pebbles are polished, diamonds are dimmed” itself signifies the importance of
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university
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a university
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education
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. In a sense, applying for prestigious establishments can assist citizens to achieve their ambitions and give them the best chances to improve their knowledge. Because the
universities
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 have well-known professors
that
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they
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who
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 have professional experience and can help
people
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 to become successful.
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, when
people
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 have gone to
universities
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, they have developed
their
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apply
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practical
skills
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such
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 as communication
skills
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, time management and leadership
skills
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 and these
skills
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 can influence their future lives. In my opinion, going to top
universities
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 provide
students
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 with comprehensive
educations
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education
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 that we cannot find
in
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any place.
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, becoming more successful in
life
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 can result in effective
education
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 in
educational
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an educational
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institution
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institutions
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. In conclusion,
people
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 have numerous opportunities for a career path with the help of a high degree
whereas
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students
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 have
also
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 an option to register in
less duration
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 courses that will help to gain practical
skills
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.
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, I believe that
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university
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a university
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 degree is the most important to become successful in
life
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 as graduation is one of the basic requirements when it comes to recruitment.
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