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The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The first chart gives information on the proportion of how many bottles of
Coca-Cola
 are sold in 5 different regions.
Also
, the second chart indicates the change
of
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Coca-cola's
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Coca-Cola's
sharing
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 prices from 1996 to 2001.
Overall
, 30.4% of
Coca-cola
 bottles which is the largest are purchased in North America.
Cerncerning
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Concerning
price
, the year when
Coca-cola
 bottles were bought at the highest
price
 was 1998. Looking at the first graph, the figure for North America accounted
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 biggest proportion at 30.4% which is nearly twice as large as that for Asia followed by that for Latin America at 25.7%.
On the other hand
,
the
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Coca-cola
 pets were sold at 7% in Africa and
Middle
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 East, which is the smallest and approximately half of the percentage of volume in Asia at 16.4%.
According to
 the second graph, the
price
 of
Coca-cola
 was around 40$ in 1996, which was the lowest
price
 in
this
 graph. It started to soar roughly from 40$ to 70$ by 1997.
However
, since 1997,
it's
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its
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price
 fluctuated until 2001. It peaked
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the
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 highest point at 80$ in 1998. Despite a minimal increase in 2000, it had a downward trend from 1998 to 2001 and hit the second cheapest point at about 48$ in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coca-cola, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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