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Despite the increased access to education a significant number of people cannot read or write. What are the disadvantages and what action shouldthe government take

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In spite of the increased access to
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 a majority proportion of
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people
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 cannot read or write.
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people
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 and what
measure
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 should
government
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the government
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 take to resolve it The main consequence ,
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, the person
face
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faces
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 many
diffulties
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difficulties
 when they are not having basic
education
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. To be clearer,
the
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people
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 find
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har
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hard
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 to get
job
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 impact the standard of living of the
people
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 and
also
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 be in a position
to
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where
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illterate
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illiterate
 cannot
fullfill
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fulfil
the
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 basic needs
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, the
people
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 who are not having beginner level
education
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this
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 make them lonely in their life
as well as
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 the society may ignore
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illterate
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illiterate
literate
people
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 because they are not having
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education
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 to
compet
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compete
 with the present generation.
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,
thse
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the
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illterate
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illiterate
literate
people
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 live below the poverty line because they are not having
sufficient
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job
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jobs
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 to lead
better
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a better
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 life.
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, the
people
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 living in
northern
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the northern
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 side of India are not having basic
education
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 so that
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people
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 cannot attain
better
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 standard of living .
Education
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 is
complusary
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compulsory
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life more fruitful The government can sort out
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 situation by providing
complusary
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compulsory
education
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these
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people
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 because
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 with
high
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a high
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 literacy rate can trickle the
country
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 growth so it is
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 priority to give
education
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 to these
people
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 in the society .
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 ,the authority can allocate free
education
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 to these
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illterate
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illiterate
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people
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due to
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this
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people
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a
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eager
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 to
enroll
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for
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on
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this
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 course
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 can give them money
free
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for free
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education
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,
government
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the government
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 can boot up
new
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 online
medium
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of
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because
while
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 setting up
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 form of
education
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 rural area
people
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 can benefit from
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 form of
education
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 there are several
drawback
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drawbacks
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for
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this
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 situation
such
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 as avoidance from
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society and jobless,
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 can be sorted can by providing free
education
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 to the common
people
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