Seint Naychi Oo: Do you believe that professional athletes make good role models for young people? Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge-edge or experience. Koko : bby
Some huge
people
state that professional athletes
are a good example
for the young generation. I fully disagree with this
opinion, because professional athletes
are not the universal example
for young people
in general and additionally
sportsmen
are just simple people
with good and bad behaviour in different situations.
First of all, I believe that all kinds of sportsmen
including athletes
make good role
models only for people
, who want to become a sportsman in the future. In other words
, each job and even each role
in society require a different set of knowledge and soft skills. For instance
, it is evident that professional athletes
can not provide a good example
for a person, whose aim is to be an excellent parent. At the same time, for the pupils in sport
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sports
athletes
could become far more inspiring than any other person.
Moreover
, a good role
model
doesn't consist only of professional achievements. It almost always includes some personal sportsmen
's features and behaviour in daily life. Unfortunately, some athletes
with amazing wins and withAdd an article
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amount
of medals do awful things. Fix the agreement mistake
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For
example
, there were some reports when famous sportsmen
left their families and have not helped with their children later. What I mean, it is a very difficult task to separate the professional life of athletes
and their personal life.
In conclusion, I am convinced that the role
model
, which is based on professional athletes
' achievements and behaviour, is not the best role
model
for children and teens. In my opinion that this
role
model
is too narrow and moreover
, this
role
model
ignores that professional athletes
are not only strong sportsmen
without all disadvantages.Submitted by galima.ant on
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