Seint Naychi Oo: Do you believe that professional athletes make good role models for young people? Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge-edge or experience. Koko : bby

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Some
people
state that professional
athletes
are a good
example
for the young generation. I fully disagree with
this
opinion, because professional
athletes
are not the universal
example
for young
people
in general and
additionally
sportsmen
are just simple
people
with good and bad behaviour in different situations. First of all, I believe that all kinds of
sportsmen
including
athletes
make good
role
models only for
people
, who want to become a sportsman in the future.
In other words
, each job and even each
role
in society require a different set of knowledge and soft skills.
For instance
, it is evident that professional
athletes
can not provide a good
example
for a person, whose aim is to be an excellent parent. At the same time, for the pupils in
sport
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schools
athletes
could become far more inspiring than any other person.
Moreover
, a good
role
model
doesn't consist only of professional achievements. It almost always includes some personal
sportsmen
's features and behaviour in daily life. Unfortunately, some
athletes
with amazing wins and with
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huge
amount
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of medals do awful things.
For
example
, there were some reports when famous
sportsmen
left their families and have not helped with their children later. What I mean, it is a very difficult task to separate the professional life of
athletes
and their personal life. In conclusion, I am convinced that the
role
model
, which is based on professional
athletes
' achievements and behaviour, is not the best
role
model
for children and teens. In my opinion that
this
role
model
is too narrow and
moreover
,
this
role
model
ignores that professional
athletes
are not only strong
sportsmen
without all disadvantages.
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