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Some people believe city life is getting more difficult whereas others think it’s becoming easier. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Cities have changed much over the years and so a number of
people
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 believe that these changes have made their lives easier
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 others argue the opposite.
This
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 my reasoning as to why I agree with the latter opinion. The growth of cities provides services
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 as public transport to increase and improve.
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, as more money is being saved, less is being spent on consumer goods
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 as cars which congest roads. Cities
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 attract foreigners
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 growing job opportunities, creating more diversity and because of
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, there are more relationships and friendships being formed that would have
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 never happened.
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, Overpopulation is a major reason
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why many might find city life difficult. As the housing market and employment are directly affected
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 results in a huge amount of
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 becoming homeless and unemployed proving that there are a few cons to living in the city. Another reason to add to the difficulty is that
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 can find it tough to socialize
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 the development of modern technology. As
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 nowadays prefer to communicate online rather than face-to-face there are fewer chances to build friendships naturally.
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,
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 on transportation, namely trains and busses, are buried in their phones making it hard for someone to want to approach and start a conversation.
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, even though there are major benefits to living in a city, I recognise that there are bigger issues that come
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 it. In my opinion, I would prefer to live
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, as becoming homeless is a great fear of mine.
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