Discuss the disadvantages of eating fast food on health. Why do people eat fast food? What can be done to discourage it?

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Having junky
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in a daily diet has a bad impact on people’s lives and themselves. Unfortunately, society does not put too much attention to what problems it can create, as it is too delicious and addictive.
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, we should take the matter into our hands and make
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kind of
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less available to purchase, around the world. No matter how tasty fast
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may be, it is extremely unhealthy for the human body. People think, feeding ourselves with
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food
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is amazing and make us feel delightful.
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, eating it
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develops a bad habit and may conclude in
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serious health issues. Which may result in obesity or a heart attack.
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, junky
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is not nutritious and does not include the sufficient vitamins that the human body needs to survive and develop in a proper way. Unfortunately, not many have
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knowledge.
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to eat
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fast
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must be put into the minds who eat that regularly. The world should spread more awareness of what may happen to them if they do not start taking care of themselves. Diet is a sufficient part of our lives and it affects us a lot.
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why fast-
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shops should be less available.
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, humanity would not be as tempted to feed
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with
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unhealthy
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. There is a saying "You become what you eat".
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Society should reflect on it more often, as there are too many people who eat fast
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on daily basis. It has too many disadvantages as it creates a big risk to their health which is quite dangerous.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unhealthy
  • obesity
  • nutrients
  • heart disease
  • diabetes
  • addictive
  • convenience
  • time constraints
  • marketed
  • accessible
  • regulations
  • availability
  • dependence
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