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Some people believe that we succeed in sport do to our inborn talent. Others argue that continues working on oneself is a key success. What do you think?

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Some peoples believe that a successful sportsman or sportswoman is always born,
whereas
 others argue that they are made by continuous
practice
 and hard work.
This
 essay defends that rigorous,dedicated and continuous
practice
 is the key to being successful in the world of sports. to thrive in a competitive environment, sports personalities must ensure that they perform better than other peers.
This
 is achieved by regular training and rehearsals of the sport.
For instance
, spinners always keep track of their loop completion time to compare with previous records and tries to beat their own best performance. Continuous
practice
by
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oneself
boost
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 the confidence level of the athlete. Sport is nothing but a certain set of rules where someone has to show his/her expertise, and practising regularly injects the perfections. Mention, cricketers play many net
practice
 matches before the actual game. In my opinion, excellency in sports is achieved by putting a lot of effort into people rather than getting born with talent.
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