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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important to a country.

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People have different opinions on what is the most significant to a country's
development
.
While
 others say financial security is superior of all, I strongly believe that other forms of growth are
similarly
 vital. On the one hand, being economically secured as a
nation
 is very essential for
development
.
This
 is because the leaders will be able to get enough funds to build hospitals, roads, schools and other social amenities which will aid in improving citizens' standard of living.
This
 idea has made most governments extra focused on how their country achieves financial independence.
Furthermore
, if a
state
 is economically inclined authorities are able to create numerous employment opportunities and employ more individuals so that everyone gets paid and has a sense of satisfaction. For ,example because Ghana is a developing country there are fewer job vacancies for the public, and
this
 has contributed to increasing social vices
such
 as crimes because most citizens are unemployed.
On the other hand
, I think that other types of progress are equally essential for
nation
-building. I am saying
this
 because
although
 money is a necessary element of
development
 if there is no peace and stability in a
state
development
 becomes impeded.
This
 makes it clear that maintaining harmony in society is equal to generating resources for the
state
's improvement. I believe that there can't be any proper growth in a place where wars and conflict are rampant. I remember how a very developed and beautiful town in Ghana was destroyed by war. ,
Also
 I am of the view inverting in Human Resources is significant too as it is the population who will contribute to building the
state
, so if most of the crowd is not known is somehow impossible to improve the
nation
. In conclusion,
although
 being economically stable is essential for a
nation
's
development
, I am of the opinion that we should pay similar attention to other forms of growth with can help build a
nation
.
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