Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In the current age,
technology
become affordable and
avalibal
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available
which
lead
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many
people
doing
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their
work
from home and
trnsfer
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transfer
their children's education system to be online .
However
, I am
staunch
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believer that using
cutting edge
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technology
to achieve
people
's tasks has a beneficial impact on their lives.
First,
using developed
technology
supports workers and students to avoid
daily
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commute.
In other words
, if
people
use online platforms to achieve their
work
and study, it will save plenty of consumed time in transportation.
This
time can be spent
to have
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fun with their families,
that
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which
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would build strong relationships among
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member
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members
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, and
this
would have a positive effect on their
work
performance .
This
can be exemplified in the "Google"
technology
company
,
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when
had
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decided to give their worker the option to
work
from home or
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, they
have
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found
employee's
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employees'
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performance
are
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increased when they start working from their home.
Hence
, working stability and flexibility could lead to more achievement for any company.
Second,
proffesional
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professional
education schools are overpriced normally and
with
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using
technology
that could let them
be
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more
accessable
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accessible
for many
people
.
This
means if schools transfer their system to become online, that will
signaficantly
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significantly
reduce the operational and maintenance cost.
For example
, "Khan
Acadimy
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Academy
" is an international educational organization which does not have a building
,
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and all their
teaches
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teachers
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from around the world.
Therefore
,
technology
enabled getting a high educational level from different
background
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backgrounds
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with
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at
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lower
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a lower
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cost. In conclusion, depending on
technology
to be a vital part of
people
's lives has many advantages which will open various opportunities for
people
and
this
is what I believe.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • e-learning
  • accessibility
  • inclusive
  • productivity
  • personalized learning
  • disciplined routine
  • interpersonal skills
  • cybersecurity
  • sustainability
  • work-life balance
  • physical disabilities
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