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Many people use written language in a less formal and more relaxed way. Why? Does this development have advantages and disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
There is no doubt these days
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 individuals controversy surrounding the
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modern
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communication
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what
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 the cons and
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pros
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using
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In terms of aetiology
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spread
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 the unformal verbal communications recently . The main reason given to support the claim is
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inventory
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technology items . To illustrate , the new generation
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utilise their
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apply
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smart phone
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smartphone
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while
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a peer
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 or their
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families
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etc
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, they are using
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every
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every
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intelligent
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informal
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make
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 it plentiful soft and flexible .
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Also
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visible
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academic
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business
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failed
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Because
 they are in rush and busy and had no time to
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employ
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when they want to
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talk
take
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the collage
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collage
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college
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,supervisor and director following the public way of
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Moreover
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, there are various
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drawbacks
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 melted
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origenal
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original
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Firstly
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,
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the dissapearance
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dissapearance
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disappearance
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culture
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 identity over
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 of time .
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meaningful
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strong grammar
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Conclusion
In
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conclusion
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although
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 there
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consider
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who consider
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better
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a better
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 method to
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apply
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other and
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some
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 of them
they
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apply
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think in
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the oppsite
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oppsite
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opposite
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direction
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 less effective .
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 , I believe formal
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language
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used
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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