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It has been suggested that everyone in the world want to own a car, a TV and a fridge. Do you think disadvantage of such a development outweigh advantages?

#world #car #tv #fridge #development
Nowadays, it
is
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has been said that all
people
 have to own
households
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 possessions,
such
 as cars, TVs and refrigerators. Though, at face value,
this
 might be seen as a
favorable
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 change, I believe
this
 suggestion, for the most part,
disadvantageous
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.
Initially
, it is essential to consider some possible upsides to
wide
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 use of these items. First and foremost,
people
 can indisputably increase their standards of living.
That is
,
as well as
 the number of
people
 possessing these household goods
increase
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, so does the likelihood of maintaining prosperous life.
For example
,
people
, resourcing themselves with these possessions; lessen their chances of facing hardships in the moments when they are needed, like not relying on
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neighbor’s
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 car in emergency situations. Another benefit of
widespread
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 use of
the
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household items, relating
to
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 TVs and fridges, would be in
favor
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 of producers of these appliances. From an economic perspective, extensive use of any item will result in a greater demand for production.
This
 is likely to benefit manufacturers and other companies that rely on homeowners to buy their products,
thus
ensuing
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 better revenue. Despite the advantages mentioned above, I believe
drawbacks
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 of
this
 trend are more significant. The chief problem is that greenfield sites would be depleted seeing as
the
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 need in order for cars to park. In
this
 sense, not only green
areas
 will continue to be diminished, as urban
areas
 proceed to sprawl, but it
also
 leads to
exploitation
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 of natural resources. Take Manhattan as an example, a surplus number of parking lots are ‘eating’ natural habitats, let alone
areas
 for housing, which are being dwindled.
Secondly
, energy-hungry appliances, especially TVs and fridges, require electricity to operate and more electricity will be needed, if these appliances were used widely.
In other words
, not all countries generate energy using renewable sources, which might
consequently
 face financial and environmental problems. All in all,
while
pros
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 of
this
 trend are worth considering, I would contend that problems resulting, like
shrinkage
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the shrinkage
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 of natural
areas
 and feasible issues, far outstrip its positives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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