The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area fo britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show hoe it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area fo britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show hoe it was distributed.
The table displays information about where were police
money
income
while
the pie charts illustrate how the budget was distributed in one area of Britain for 2017 and 2018.
Overall
, it can be seen that in both
year
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,
National
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the National
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government was a major source of the
money
income and employed salaries were the most proportion of
money
spent. The total budgets
was
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304.7
million
and 318.6
million
in 2017 and 2018 respectively. In 2017, the most income which came from the national government was 175.5
million
and
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increased to 177.8
million
in 2018. The local taxes, which were the second in both years, were 97.2
million
in 2017 and dramatically rose to 102.3
million
in 2018,
while
other sources slightly remained the same. Turning to information about where
money
was distributed, in 2017 and 2018, the figure for offers and staff salaries were the biggest, accounting for 75% and 69% respectively. The percentage of structure and vehicle payments remained the same at 17%
whereas
the proportion of technology-paid increased from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018.
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