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All university undergraduate courses should include a period of time spent studying abroad or doing a work placement. Do you think the advantages of this would outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
Nowadays,
it is clear that
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 many
universities
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 undergraduate courses have the
option
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 to
study
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 abroad or the
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 to do a
work
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placement
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. In my opinion, the advantages of
this
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option
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 are relevant
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 every
students
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 should have the opportunity and the chance to
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 abroad.
Body paragraph 1
It is clear that
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 a large part of universities in the world includes some programs to
study
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 in a different country during a certain period of time, but
also
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 a
work
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placement
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 or an internship,
for instance
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 many business school in Europe gives the chance to do a program name “Erasmus”which offer a large variety of other school in Europe with different
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 paths, which is very helpful for students to discover other culture, customs and other way of doing business.
Body paragraph 2
Learning in
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another
 school or doing a
work
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placement
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 can have many benefits and advantages because it can help
undergraduate
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 to understand better how working in
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another
 city can change
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, a
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 conducted by the University of Shanghai and published by the teacher Gazate in 2024 proves that many undergraduates come from far to discover better how the world works.
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, people coming from
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other continents
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believe
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 that it is very refreshing to learn in
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another
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Conclusion
To recapitulate, I definitely believe that there is a large variety of advantages of studying or doing a
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placement
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 in different places and having the
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 to do an exchange
study
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 path can help to understand and grasp other ways of learning.

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task response
Give a clear answer to the main question in the first paragraph: say that the good points are greater than the bad points. Then add at least one bad point, such as cost, stress, or the fact that some students cannot move away from home.
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Develop each main idea more fully. Explain how study abroad can help with language, new ways of life, and future jobs. Explain how work placement can give real job skills and help students know what work they want to do.
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Your example about Erasmus is useful, but make it more exact and link it to your view. Do not use a study or a teacher name unless you can clearly explain it. A simple real-life example is often better.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer four-part plan: introduction, good points, bad points, and conclusion. This will make it easier for the reader to follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body paragraph focus on one main point. For example, one paragraph can be about study abroad and another can be about work placement and possible problems.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care: 'First', 'Also', 'However', 'For example', and 'Therefore'. Make sure each new sentence adds to the point before it.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating phrases such as 'It is clear' and 'advantages'. Use simple different words, such as 'benefits', 'good points', 'help', and 'chance'.
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You give a clear positive view and stay on the topic of study abroad and work placement.
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You include useful ideas about learning about other cultures, customs, and ways of work.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two main paragraphs, and a short conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use examples and linking phrases such as 'For example' and 'In addition' to join ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • study abroad
  • work placement
  • real-world experience
  • practical skills
  • academic knowledge
  • open-minded
  • independent
  • self-confidence
  • adapt to change
  • career chances
  • cultural understanding
  • language skills
  • financial cost
  • family responsibilities
  • compulsory
  • flexible choice
  • personal growth
  • hands-on learning
  • future employer
  • equal opportunity
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