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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative

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Many kids spent their daily
time
 on
smartphones
. I believe that there is a negative aspect and I would show how it is. Nowadays, world technologies have been developed for
easily
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which
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and
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 became
an essential equipment
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essential equipment
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 in our routine use
such
as
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smartphones
, and tablets.
That is
 a reason why
children
 are attached and spent their most of
time
in
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every day on
smartphones
. The negative aspect of using smart mobile phones in
children
 would be a lack of real-life communication skills that
has
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 been a crucial ability when they grow up. If they spent their
time
 only on
smartphones
, they would have no
time
 to talk to others and practice their speech with people. There could be affected when they are in working life and
this
 competency is important for doing
them
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 jobs.
For example
, on
smartphones
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 kids would use just
to
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see and listen to what they watch but they would not talk to real-life people and got feedback to increase their skills. In conclusion, the
smartphones
 are simply reached by
children
then
 there would be a reason why they apply the most
time
 with. I would totally argue that there is a downsides aspect when
the
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children
 spent more
time
 with these technologies
phones
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and phones
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 because they would drop their
competent
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 to communicate with real-life people.
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