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The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The given figures represent sales and share prices of Coca-cola. The volume of sales divided by region was presented in a pie
chart
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,
while
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 the share prices between 1996 and 2001 were displayed in a line
chart
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.
According to
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 the pie
chart
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, it can be seen that North America was the largest section, which is 30.4% ,
whereas
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 Africa and the Middle East are the smallest part, which is 7%.
According to
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 the line
chart
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, it starts the period at the bottom of the graph,which just above 30, it was increased to nearly 50% and dropped down in the middle of the year 1997 and reach the peak of the graph in 1988 and it
has
Add the particle
tohas
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 fluctuate and end the timeframe at above 50. In conclusion, the information experienced
fluctuate
Wrong verb form
fluctuating
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trend
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trends
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 throughout the whole timeframe.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuate" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuations
  • market share
  • geographic distribution
  • revenue
  • financial performance
  • quarterly reports
  • shareholder
  • economic indicators
  • consumer behavior
  • aggregate data
  • profit margins
  • fiscal period
  • trend analysis
  • variance
  • growth rate
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