You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

Television
has become an integral part of people's life, becoming the main source of consuming news, entertainment and music.
However
, the amount of
hours
spent on
television
is on the rise, minimising the
time
we spend with friends and family, and
make
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making
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us feel lethargic. I firmly believe that
this
trend is harmful and must be reversed. The more
the
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time
spent on
television
, the more one would feel disconnected
with
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from
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social life.
This
is
due to
the fact that
television
programs
are interesting and in turn
additictive
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addictive
and
replaces
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the need for socializing.
For example
, 60% of young adults surveyed recently mentioned that they felt less required to talk to someone else when consuming telecasted
programs
for more than six
hours
a day.
This
excessive
time
spent
on
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watching
programs
on
television
will lead to decreased satisfaction
of
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in
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social life. The second reason, connected to the
first,
is the constant feeling of being lazy. Consuming long
hours
of televised
programs
requires one to be seated in a place for
long
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time
, which leads to the body to start feeling less energized and active. Doctors claim that
that
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a
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lack of movement for more than thirty minutes will lead to reduced energy and productivity.
For instance
, it is
determind
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determined
that on
an
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average a person spends about three
hours
seated on
sofa
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the sofa
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to consume a
foot ball
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football
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game.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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