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Government should spend money on railways rather than road. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#government #money #railways #road
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In
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 modern world, travelling becomes more popular, and a group of
people
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 suggest that the cabinet needs to invest more in the rail sector rather than roadways. Howbeit, to a large extent, I disagree with
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 because travellers do not always wait in line for trains. My view with appropriate examples is explained in
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 paragraphs. There are myriad reasons to argue that funding for railroads is more appropriate than road construction. Mainly, rails are not used as a common way to travel, but numerous humans are using roadways for their routine. The option tracks are well connected from home to the destination; even to go to subways, passengers need to move from the roadside. Eventually, if the condition of the pathway is good, the vehicle may easily run on it.
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, bikes, bicycles, cars, or other heavy vehicles are running on the road.
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,
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 have become more impatient recently, so they avoid waiting for trains;
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, they choose to drive their own vehicles, and for that purpose, the government needs to focus more on developing the highways. If the road is improved, it will indirectly encourage
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 to drive smoothly. In brief, the number of accidents and damage caused by crashes will be reduced.
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, the argument from the group of
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 will be considered if the government just focuses on the tour and tourism sector in detail. Tourist services are the main economy in a few countries, and for that, the railway industry will play a crucial role. In conclusion, tracks are basically used by all individuals. So funding to improve pathways is more beneficial than funding rail paths.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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