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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. What is your opinion on this matter?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books #matter
In the digital era , everything has been available on the internet . Some
people
 argued that in the future, everybody read
books
 and newspapers on the website.
As a result
, physical
books
 will be disappeared. I agree with
such
 a viewpoint because there are a plethora
advantages
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 of e-
books
. I will discuss
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 the ensuing paragraphs . There are several advantages to technology
such
 as
e-book
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e-books
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 nowadays,
people
 are busy with their work. So, they do not have time to sit and read
newspaper
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the newspaper
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.
Therefore
, it is very
convinent
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convenient
 to read and listen
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 or book
on
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the
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online.
Moreover
, the rate book
are
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 affordable
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the
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online as compared to
market
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the market
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 .
For example
, harry potter
books
 are only 5 dollars
in
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 the official website
although
market
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 price is 50 dollars, it is very expensive .
Furthermore
, the biggest advantage of the
e-book
 system is a
save
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 environment. There are
thousand
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tonnes
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of tonnes
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 of wood
need
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 to make
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paper. Everyone
use
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the
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apply
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e-book
consequently
, we save our ecosystem.
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,
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the
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 survey
of
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times
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india
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,
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these days
 43% of
infant
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infants
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use
 digital
periodical
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periodicals
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.
On the contrary
 , some
people
 are against
such
 a
view point
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. In the contemporary
era
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 most
of
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folks
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the folks
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 work
infrontof
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in front of
 the screen
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for atleast
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atleast
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at least
 6.8 hours . So, they tried to watch
screen
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the screen
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 and read. Another
problems
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 is
the
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 aged
people
 do not
use
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the screen
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screens
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 for
long
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 time and they
use
physical
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the physical
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book
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books
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 and newspapers.
In addition
, some of
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 is not available on the internet because of privacy issues . For
examplify
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example
, the government do not publish accurate data because of
enemy
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an enemy
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 country. In
conclusion
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e-book
 or journal
availibity
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availability
 is very
conviented
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convinced
 and
also
 cheap .
Therefore
, it may be
printed
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that printed
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
books
 is disappeared in the near future.
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