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Tell us about one or two times where you have utilised your problem solving skills to achieve an outcome.

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In terms of my problem-solving skill, I actually utilised the skill when I worked in my first workplace. I launched my career at Kumagaya boys high
school
, which used to be one of the most academic schools in Japan.
However
, as
achievements
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 of the
school
 got worse year by year, the
school
 lost its reputation. When I was appointed to the
school
, it seemed to me that the
teachers
 lacked
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 to endeavour and reach students’ full potential.
Then
 I first attempted to define the problem. I shortly recognised that the
school
 motto that educational activities should rely on students’ decisions didn’t fit the real situation. Compared to the past, the students were less independent,
whereas
 the
teachers
 did not change their teaching styles over time.
Therefore
, I thought the
teachers
 should involve themselves
to
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 students’ activities more. Afterwards, I encouraged some of
young
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teachers
 to do so together, which definitely enhanced
school’s
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 mood and students could spend their
school
 life more comfortably.
This
 practice rapidly spread through the teacher team. Of course, I could not analyse accurately how
this
 practice influenced the students’ activities but indeed the students after I came to the
school
 made more successful achievements than they used to be. I learned that if you face some difficulties it may be vital to identify the root cause of the problem, brainstorm potential solutions to address the identified root cause, implement the chosen solution and monitor the outcomes logically in the end.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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