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In The Past, When Students Did A University Degree, They Tended To Study In Their Own Countr

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In
this
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 modern era, the
university student
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 ratio has increased for the
last
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 two decades dramatically
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 to people
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 more
awareness
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 about higher studies
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, most
students
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 would like to go to study abroad as compared
their
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to their
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 own nation for many reasons.
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 and demerits of
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 improvement for the following reasons.
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abroad education opportunities give more advantages to the
students
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 the host nation. The main advantage is overseas
pupil
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gotten a better lifestyle in order to they will satisfy
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their's family needs and wants.
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many developed nations bring a lot of overseas
pupil
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pupils
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 from other parts of the world
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, they can earn
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massive capital from
students
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 in order to they can use
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hoist state infrastructure developments.
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, globalisation is the main reason for
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 modern trend. Certainly,
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 trend has some demerits one possible drawback is the
students
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 face
cultural
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 shock when they enter a
forgien
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foreign
 and they get
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 they miss their family and friends.
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the survey said that more than 40% of international pupils affect depression for the first three months after they can adopt the new environment
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 culture.
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, another drawback is some person has decided to face suicide because they cannot accept and adopt the new
admosphere
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atmosphere
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, certainly,
this
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 phenomenon has merits
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 demerits. I think
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 on the person's mindset and situation. I hope
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 trend is conducive for the next generation to build a
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 society.

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