You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job. Write a letter to the restaurant’s manager. In your letter, -Explain that you would like to apply for the job -Give some details of any relevant experience that you have -Specify the days and times that would suit you

I am writing to apply for the position which was advertised on your Instagram account. My name is Negar and I live near your restaurant, a walk distance
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minutes approximately. I have
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relevant
experience in cooking
along with
serving special food
such
as steak on fire. I
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in Chalet restaurant for three years as
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,
while
I was studying
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the university. Apart from my duties
such
as taking orders and cleaning, I have learnt to serve unique steaks with fire. By 2022, I had participated in some cooking
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and
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I am working as a chef
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Deja Vu restaurant on weekdays and I am looking for weekend shifts.
However
, I can
also
work on weekdays after 3 pm. I am an
ethusiastic
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enthusiastic
and hard-working person and with my great skills and appropriate experience, I would be able to
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your food quality. I look forward to receiving your
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. Yours faithfully, Negar Sedigh
Submitted by Negar_seddigh on

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task achievement
You effectively presented your application and relevant experiences, maintaining a clear focus throughout the letter. To further enhance your response, consider providing more specific examples of how your skills could directly benefit the restaurant.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, consider proofreading your letter to correct small typographical errors (e.g., "relevent" should be "relevant", and remember to use periods at the end of sentences). This will make your letter even more polished and professional.
coherence cohesion
You clearly structured your letter, including an introduction, body paragraphs detailing your experience and availability, and a closing statement, which reflects a good organizational pattern.
task achievement
Your use of personal experience and specific skills (like serving "steak on fire") was an excellent way to demonstrate your suitability for the job.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunity
  • hospitality
  • customer service
  • availability
  • flexibility
  • relevant experience
  • part-time
  • apply
  • enthusiastic
  • schedule
  • diligent
  • team player
  • efficient
  • detail-oriented
  • proactive
  • communicative
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