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The chart below shows the percentage of adults who received qualifications from a range of education providers in three years.

The chart below shows the percentage of adults who received qualifications from a range of education providers in three years.
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The given bar graph illustrates the
proportions
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 of adults who got qualifications from a set of education
providers
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 in three years.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that the
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proportions
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proportion
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 of people who received qualifications from all
providers
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 had a significant increase over the whole period, with the exception of
trades
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.
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, high
school
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 graduates made up most of the qualified adults throughout the given period. In terms of the education
providers
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 with the highest and lowest percentages, high
school
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 started at 23 in 1981. It grew gradually over the next two decades, peaking at 28. Meanwhile,
trades
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 stood at almost half the
proportions
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 of high
school
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 at 11% at the start and saw no change in percentage over the period. Regarding the two other education
providers
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, college and university began at just below
trades
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 at 9 and 10 respectively. They rose moderately by 3 in the following decade, before experiencing a drastic spike to reach
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 peak at 18 in 2001. Despite surpassing
trades
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, both college and university still had lower
proportions
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 than high
school
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportions, providers, trades, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 4 times.
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