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In many cities, old buildings are being destroyed to create more space for new housing. What is your opinion?

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Who is the person from the next generation? Like everything in our
live
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 humanity is in
constant
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a constant
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 process of its
developing
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. Generations come after each other containing cultural features of their ancestors and bringing something new
according
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 changing environment and other conditions of existence. Saving necessary
experience
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 of their
parents
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 people of the future have to face
with
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unknowing circumstances and make a new
step
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for
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 resolving
it
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. The highest speed of progress we have
opportunity
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 to observe in
sphere
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 of
technologies
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. Now our brain needs to process
the
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 great amount of information and
thus
 in some period of
time
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 users will manage to make decisions faster than ever.
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, all possibilities of the future have another side. It’s first of all unavoidable deterioration of
global
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 environment. Because of
this
 more intention will be paid
on
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 ecological issues. Humanity will have to estimate
its
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involving
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on
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 nature carefully and constantly. Separate garbage collection, conscious consumption and care for our planet will be integral components of
personality
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the personality
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 of each human being. In that
way
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 the person from the next generation will possess great potential in brain abilities and
high
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 value the surrounding life conditions for every being
of
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 the planet.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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