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Some people think that individuals today are more dependent on each other. Others believe people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #individuals
There is an ongoing debate
whether
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about whether
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people
 today are more independent or depend on each other more than before. In my opinion, individuals have much more interactions with
others
 today but many of them are so
standartized
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standardized
 that it is easy to live without counting on
others
. On the one hand, the amount of
people
 that a person meets per day now is usually higher that the amount of encountered
people
 during a whole life in tribal societies millennia ago. It is hard to argue that it is possible to become more independent with
such
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increasing
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an increasing
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 number of
acquintances
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acquaintances
.
However
, I stick with
an
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the
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 opinion that in most cases it is not a
relationships
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relationship
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 between two persons but rather between a person and a system.
For example
, when a patient comes to a hospital the outcome of a
threatment
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treatment
 depends less on personal relations with a doctor and more on standardized protocols.
On the other hand
, in the previous centuries and millennia being part of a tribe or a clan was a matter of survival. Without other mates surviving
a
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harsh weather or fighting predators or other humans in coalitions was near to impossible.
Therefore
, dependency on
others
 was much stronger than nowadays. In my opinion, it is a valid claim. An illustration
for
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of
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 that was using exile from a group as the most severe punishment that was close to a death sentence.
To conclude
,
although
people
 today have more
communications
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communication
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 with
others
, they are more independent compared to the times when forming coalitions with
others
 was matter of life and death. Reliable institutions decreased
importance
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the importance
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 of personal connections.
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