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these days, many people have their own computer and telephones, so it is quite easy for them, to do their work at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages

#people #computer #telephones #work #home
In today's world, there is no doubt that most
of
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people
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 have
their
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personal
phone
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 and computer.
Therefore
, it is quite possible for them to have
a
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distance
work
. In my point of view,
main
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 advantages of working at home are
an
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opportiunity
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opportunity
 to have a good balance between
work
 and
live
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, and
possibility
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the possibility
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 to
work
 for
huge
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 international company. On the one hand, working online may be
good
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 idea if
people
 prefer to live in a rural area, but want to
work
 for
big
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 company. As some
people
 like to travel more than two
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 per year,
online
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an online
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job
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 will be
good
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 way to do it.
Thus
, the technologies give us amazing
opportiunity
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opportunity
 to live in a good environment
out
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 of the cities or travel a
lot
 and
till
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 be a part of a big corporation.
For instance
, more than 30 per cent of workers for Amazon and Google might
work
 online from
time
 to
time
.
Apart from
this
, a
lot
 of
people
 do not want to spend a
lot
 of
time
 not only
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comite
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commute
but
also
 they do not want
waste
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 money
for
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a car
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car
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 or public transport. I think that working at home may save money and
time
 for more important things
such
 as family and
hobby
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.
For instance
, most
of
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people
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the people
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 who live in
a
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big cities spend more than one hour
to commit
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 to their workplaces.
Accordingly
, a
lot
 of
people
 waste more than two hours every day that could
be spend
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for
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 friends or
relax
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.
To sum up
, I believe that working at home has a
lot
 of advantages
such
 as
edditional
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additional
 free
time
 and
possibility
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the possibility
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 to live where you want.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Telecommuting
  • Remote work
  • Flextime
  • Self-discipline
  • Productivity
  • Autonomy
  • Work-life balance
  • Virtual meetings
  • Teleconferencing
  • Time management
  • Distractions
  • Isolation
  • Networking
  • Collaborative tools
  • Ergonomics
  • Sustainability
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