Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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that
people
must cherish the present time
instead
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justifications . The main reason why I believe living in the present is the best decision to bring happiness in
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individual's
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People
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beleive
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believe
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be changed. To illustrate, I spend my entire bachelors running behind one guy, he left me in my second year and I used to cry and
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sad songs and
then
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that phase. Another reason why I think that it is the best approach
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if
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it helps in
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physical and mental growth.
According to
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conducted at Concordia Univeristy, students who are still living in the past
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grades and poor
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never been able to fully concentrate on their
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due to
their
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. In conclusion, I completely agree that
people
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controlling their emotions attached to their past
life
but they have to try and use those incidents effectively in the present as a motivation.
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they will feel
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joyed and accomplish their desires if they are mentally active.
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