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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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society
opine
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 that
people
 must cherish the present time
instead
 of living in the past. I strongly agree with
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justifications . The main reason why I believe living in the present is the best decision to bring happiness in
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individaul's
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individual's
life
 is it makes them stress-free.
People
 do not want to bring more burden by overthinking about their past things.
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beleive
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believe
 in" let bygones be bygones" and move forward because nothing
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 be changed. To illustrate, I spend my entire bachelors running behind one guy, he left me in my second year and I used to cry and
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 sad songs and
then
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end up
 having physical problems in my body as I could not overcome
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that phase. Another reason why I think that it is the best approach
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if
people
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succeed
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life
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 it helps in
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physical and mental growth.
According to
 the recent
servey
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survey
 conducted at Concordia Univeristy, students who are still living in the past
are
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endup
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end up
 having
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 grades and poor
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academic
 grades as
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 never been able to fully concentrate on their
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due to
 their
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personal
life
experience
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experiences
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. In conclusion, I completely agree that
people
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in
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controlling their emotions attached to their past
life
 but they have to try and use those incidents effectively in the present as a motivation.
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 they will feel
overally
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overly
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 joyed and accomplish their desires if they are mentally active.
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