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Students in university education should develop specialists in one subject area rather than create a broader range of subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, more and more
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 are doing their university education. The issue of whether university
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 should
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 deeply in
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 subject area or a range of
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 is widely debated. In my opinion, both
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 paths have their advantages, but
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 really depends on the type of
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. It is usually accepted that developing specialists in
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 field is quite beneficial to
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 who have exceptional talents in
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 area
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 since
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 can maximise their potential.
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, some
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 may be extremely good at math, but they are not able to create a single
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. They will be so successful in math if they are allowed to fully concentrate on
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 subject. After their graduation, they are usually more competitive and they are able to find jobs with decent salaries,
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 as math teachers, data analysts, and mathematicians.
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, if they are forced to
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 courses that they hate,
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 as art and literature, they are very stressed and likely to fail. Eventually, they may stop going to universities.
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, learning a wide range of
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 has advantages as well.
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 way allows
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 to figure out what they really like and what their strengths and interests are. College
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 are not adequately mature, so they usually do not have a clear understanding of what each profession looks like. Most
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 don't have exceptional talents
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 fields.
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, their performance in various
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 should be roughly the same if they
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 hard enough. By giving them opportunities to try different
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, they have more concepts about these fields.
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, they can
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 determine what kinds of jobs they really want to have in their future. In conclusion, I believe that specialising in a single field and learning many courses have different benefits and are appropriate for different groups of
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. The former is suitable
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students
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 who have extraordinary potential
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 areas,
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 most ordinary
students
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 should try the latter.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expertise
  • Authorities
  • Specialization
  • Niches
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Innovation
  • Adaptability
  • Generalists
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving
  • Career shifts
  • Academic isolation
  • Employability
  • Collaborative skills
  • Networking
  • Educational systems
  • Rapidly changing job market
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