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From the last few decades, there has been an increase in international tourism. Some people think tourism is beneficial for local communities and should be engouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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recent years, more foreigners tend to visit the
country
. Some
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the local people and should be encouraged
to
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them
to
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attract more often. In
this
 essay, we can find the agreement and disagreement between
this
 development. And in my opinion, with increasing in tourists and encouraging to drag more will
beneficial
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 local businesses, positively.
Firstly
, with increasing of more international visitors and encouraging more to come gives plenty of business
opportunties
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opportunities
 to the locals and
also
 for the
country
.
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this
 income,
this
 will tend to be a positive financial boom for other businesses as well.
For example
, recently the Sri Lankan
toursim
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tourism
 authority has come up with a decision to arrange a ticket and
visitng
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visiting
 app
to
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 foreigners to be efficient
of
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 finding
attarctive
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attractive
 places to gather more visitors.
Secondly
, more
encourgement
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encouragement
tend
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 to over popularity of
forigners
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foreigners
 and unclean attractive destinations. With more and more visitors
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 to visit the
country
,
their
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 will be a huge demand for
accomdations
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accommodations
accommodation
,
foods
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 and other services
provieded
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provided
 by local enterprises.
Further
, some tend to throw away
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every where
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everywhere
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 which
tend
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 to have tidy and messy destinations which will be
disadvantage
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 to the local community to expect more clients and cleaning will
more
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 costly as well.
For instance
, untidy beaches and other destinations. In conclusion, it is more beneficial to most tourist firms to be encouraged to attract more international clients to visit
country
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 which may even
helps
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 them
as well as
 the
country
 itself.
However
,
over populated
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 foreigners may tend to have a huge demand for
accomdations
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accommodations
accommodation
,
foods
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food
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 and other services
provieded
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provided
 by local enterprises with untidy popular tourist attraction sights.
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