The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organizations. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Thesis statement: Disadvantages outweigh advantages

Private data from many people

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kept by big internet companies and organizations.

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allows them to grant access to sensitive

information

such

as your personal name, your local address and your recent activities online, which helps you

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unwanted or unsuitable commercials online.

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, failure to protect people's

information

may lead to privacy issues and damage the

companies

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reputation.

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problem. Every website has something called "cookies". When you accept their "cookies", you allow that site to read your basic

information

, including your name, your location, nationality,

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your previous search history.

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is very essential especially

big

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names like Google, Facebook, Youtube,

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Bing

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because it lets them

to

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display suitable advertisements to your personal preference,

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and prevent

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unwanted or annoying ads that may disturb you.

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, if your data were improperly protected, it may lead to serious privacy problems. Your leaked

information

might be sold to anonymous hackers,

scammers

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for

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profit, and your safety is concerned. There was a time when Facebook - the biggest social media platform, was reported by users because their accounts

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hacked, the reason for

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is

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the password linked to their account was stored in plain text, which data miners found out and exploited

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fact to steal multiple accounts from different people. As the result, they have to pay a minimum of 2 billion dollars in damages. In my opinion, privacy should be the number one priority when it comes to individual info online, especially big internet companies as

this

affects their

userbase

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and the image of their company.