In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Today our work and our lifestyle force us to multitask and do something every minute of our life. So, many families try to keep

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balance between their work and raising their

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. They choose to delegate the responsibility for

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to their elder

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or to a nurse or even maybe to a computer. But what influence of

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type of upbringing have on

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? On the one hand, in

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kind of situation,

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don’t have enough attention and support from their

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is why, kids may become angry and uncontrollable to get

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much-needed attention from adults. But in my opinion, it may be corrected by a child’s hobby or by “personal child time” when

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give all attention only to their

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. And friends can be good support for coping too.

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, sometimes it may get worse and the kid’s behaviour has to be fixed by professionals, like psychologists.

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, the absence of adults has some bright advantages.

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become more responsible faster than the

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whose

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try to control and fix their every step.

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, they should know how to communicate with different people because they don’t have

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near them in every difficult situation. So these kids end up growing up sociable and flexible and these skills are really important for today. They have role models of their family members who have work and private life and because of that

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can start their careers earlier than others and can balance their work-life balance better than others. To sum it up, there are many opinions and many sides to

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question. It is

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absolutely unreal to account for the influence. But, I believe that it is individual because for some

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situation may bring a lot of advantages and they may acquire new skills along the way. But for some

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, it may be trauma and they start to cope with

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(??) in a different way and it may have good and

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bad consequences.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

342 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

dual-income household
financial stability
extracurricular activities
role models
self-reliance
independent
emotional well-being
work-life balance
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