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In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Today our work and our lifestyle force us to multitask and do something every minute of our life. So, many families try to keep
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 balance between their work and raising their
children
. They choose to delegate the responsibility for
children
 to their elder
children
 or to a nurse or even maybe to a computer. But what influence of
this
 type of upbringing have on
children
? On the one hand, in
this
 kind of situation,
children
 don’t have enough attention and support from their
parents
.
This
 is why, kids may become angry and uncontrollable to get
this
 much-needed attention from adults. But in my opinion, it may be corrected by a child’s hobby or by “personal child time” when
parents
 give all attention only to their
children
. And friends can be good support for coping too.
Although
, sometimes it may get worse and the kid’s behaviour has to be fixed by professionals, like psychologists.
On the other hand
, the absence of adults has some bright advantages.
For example
, these
children
 become more responsible faster than the
children
 whose
parents
 try to control and fix their every step.
Also
, they should know how to communicate with different people because they don’t have
parents
 near them in every difficult situation. So these kids end up growing up sociable and flexible and these skills are really important for today. They have role models of their family members who have work and private life and because of that
children
 can start their careers earlier than others and can balance their work-life balance better than others. To sum it up, there are many opinions and many sides to
this
 question. It is
also
 absolutely unreal to account for the influence. But, I believe that it is individual because for some
children
this
 situation may bring a lot of advantages and they may acquire new skills along the way. But for some
children
, it may be trauma and they start to cope with
this
 (??) in a different way and it may have good and
also
 bad consequences.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • dual-income household
  • financial stability
  • extracurricular activities
  • role models
  • self-reliance
  • independent
  • emotional well-being
  • work-life balance
  • neglected
  • quality time
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