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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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The given line graph illustrates the quantity of two types of
travelers
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travellers
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 (staying on the ships and staying on
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island
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the island
an island
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) which were contained over the
last
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 seven years from 2010 to 2017. Units were measured in millions.
Overall
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,
total
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a total
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number
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 of tourists coming to a Caribbean
Island
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 almost rose
up
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every year. It decreased slightly in 2016.
On the other hand
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, the graph of
travelers
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travellers
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 living in the ships and the
number
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 of
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a foreigner
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foreigner
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foreigners
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 living on the
island
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 fluctuated at the first of the given period of time. With regards to
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number
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a number
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 of visitors staying on the
island
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 maintained
around
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at around
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 0.7
million
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 from 2010 to 2011 and after
that
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 it went up and decreased surprisingly in 2016 but it became a peak at 1.5
million
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 in 2017.
Contrasted
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 with
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number
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a number
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 of visitors staying on the cruise ships,
it
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apply
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increased to 0.5
million
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 in the first year and became the lowest point in 2012.
Afterward
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, it rose
up
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apply
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constantly and reached a peak at 2
million
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 in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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