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The pictures show the changes of a park from 1980 to the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given maps demonstrate a
park
 in 1980 and a current one by outlining their distinctions.
Overall
, as can be seen from the pictures present
park
 has more paths and detail changes like the coloured trees and other sorts of flowers. Turning to the details, a
park
 had beautiful flowers
such
 as chamomiles in 1980,
while
instead
 of these plants, children are able to play football in the recent
park
 . Now, the northwest side of the
park
 is a special place for campings and picnics where families can relax and cook barbeque. In general, a previous scheme of the
park
 had a gate and one road along the whole
park
 ,
whereas
 the current
park
 has paths from south to north and from east to west. During the whole period, only seats around the swamp had not changed and still are located in the south-east of the
park
,
although
 in the current
park
, there are only three seatings
in contrast
 to 1980.
Submitted by 29th of april on

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