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Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed by some individuals any additional rise in economic wealth does not make citizens any more satisfied when the nation is already rich. I agree with
this
 argument if the
country
 is rich
that is
 no more impact on their satisfaction. First of all, the
country
 which is fully extended and famous or facilities are wealth development, it is seen that there are no more evaluation and buildings or abstract needed. Because there
are
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a
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birth and raised by the wealthy, their nation has a restructure before and the authorities who
is
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 controlled by the rich
country
 were hard-working before in order to involve the future result.
For example
, Dubai, they have a rich
country
 and wealthy education
centers
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, and better hospitals here. The reason why Dubai become a wealthy communication in
this
 world depends on good authorities.
Furthermore
,
people
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 who are richness
this
 is that bring a confident and individual culture.
Moreover
, the economic increase is a simple phenomenon in
this
 nation and indigenous are not feeling satisfied with it because
this
 is happening to them every single moment. The wealthy nations think the globe has no more rich countries and these people are blind to the improvement of life. Because the tourism who has become a rich
country
 are going to another middle development
country
 or beautiful scenery
country
.
This
 situation will be continued, there are no longer acknowledge other people
such
 those
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Arabia
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from Arabia
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 and Africa etc. In conclusion, I fully accept that the
country
 which is already rich, they are don’t involve in the additional economic surge
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