A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
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modern society Correct article usage
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person
's qualities are rather
controversial topic. One group of Change the article
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people
think that social status and wealth are the most important things, while
others are convinced that kindness and dignity are far more crucial. I fully agree with opinion
that old-fashioned values are still relevant today because it is far more Add an article
the opinion
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to be surrounded by friends, who are kind and concerned about you, than by individuals, who are more Correct your spelling
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powerfull
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powerful
the
society but do not have any of the best human values.
First of all, it is evident that even the richest and the most famous Correct article usage
apply
people
can do nasty and awful things. What I mean, if
someone has Add a missing verb
is if
acievments
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achievements
such
as popularity or astonishing
amount of money in the bank, it will not mean that he is a good Correct article usage
an astonishing
person
. For instance
, nowadays tabloids provide a lot of information about different celebrities, who was
involved in scandals. Correct subject-verb agreement
were
Therefore
, These people
are
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definetely
ownes either wealth Correct your spelling
definitely
and
social status, but they are not good friends and in many Correct word choice
or
case
even not appropriate family members.
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Furthermore
, today a lot of people
prefer to avoid toxic and unpleasent
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unpleasant
people
even if they are has a lot of influential connections. Additionally
, today some individuals put their effort to get rid of bad people
. For instance
, there a
huge number of tutors, who help Add a missing verb
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people
with recognising and avoiding people
with unpleasant qualitiies
. Correct your spelling
qualities
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person
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understands
situations
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as crucial as having Change preposition
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reliable
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a reliable
person
near.
In conclusion, I am convinced that it is far more important to judge people
by their actions and behaviour than by their social status. Although
rich people
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also
can betray easier than people
with higher moral qulities
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