A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

In
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modern society
person
's qualities are
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controversial topic. One group of
people
think that social status and wealth are the most important things,
while
others are convinced that kindness and dignity are far more crucial. I fully agree with
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that old-fashioned values are still relevant today because it is far more
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to be surrounded by friends, who are kind and concerned about you, than by individuals, who are more
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powerful
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society but do not have any of the best human values. First of all, it is evident that even the richest and the most famous
people
can do nasty and awful things. What I mean,
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someone has
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achievements
such
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amount of money in the bank, it will not mean that he is a good
person
.
For instance
, nowadays tabloids provide a lot of information about different celebrities, who
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involved in scandals.
Therefore
, These
people
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definetely
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ownes either wealth
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social status, but they are not good friends and in many
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even not appropriate family members.
Furthermore
, today a lot of
people
prefer to avoid toxic and
unpleasent
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unpleasant
people
even if they are has a lot of influential connections.
Additionally
, today some individuals put their effort to get rid of bad
people
.
For instance
, there
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huge number of tutors, who help
people
with recognising and avoiding
people
with unpleasant
qualitiies
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qualities
.
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wise
person
understand
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that in a number of
situations
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it is nowhere
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as crucial as having
reliable
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person
near. In conclusion, I am convinced that it is far more important to judge
people
by their actions and behaviour than by their social status.
Although
rich
people
can be useful
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someone in some situations, they
are
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also
can betray easier than
people
with higher moral
qulities
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qualities
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social status
  • material possessions
  • old-fashioned values
  • honour
  • kindness
  • trust
  • empathy
  • media influence
  • self-worth
  • metrics of success
  • financial achievements
  • community contributions
  • superficial connections
  • emotional bonds
  • life satisfaction
  • stress and anxiety
  • policy changes
  • community programs
  • restoring balance
  • personal character
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