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Many parents choose to teach their children at home instead of sending them to school. What is their reason? What are the disadvantages of this?

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Nowadays, more and more kids have to get a home
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 because of their parent’s preference not to send them to school. In
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 do not have academic knowledge and do not able to teach someone keeping high standards of
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. Usually,
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 use only information from textbooks and do not give additional information about some subjects, which can give graduated teachers.
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, frequently mothers and fathers have to combine their work with their children studying, which means that study is happening at night, which is played a bad role in the quality of
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.
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, all people get a lot of experience in relationships with other people in childhood and it creates their personal qualities in the future. Having a home
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, children skip
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 social aspect and could have problems with communication in adult life.
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, in school, teenagers learn how to resist bullying or stand up for themselves.
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, it is necessary to have some contact and communication with the opposite sex. Exclude the aspects above,
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 have a risk to make their kids alienated persons. In conclusion, I strongly believe that school
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 has cons in the educational system, but despite that, it has a lot of pros and one of them is preparing people to live in a society. Home
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 and
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 are not able to give so many different experiences to children which they will need in their future life.
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