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The local taxes resource is 102.3m, which is ranked number two.

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The given table and chart illustrated the police budget that the money spent in what categories and the sources came from 2017 to 2018 in Britain.
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, it was noticed that the table keeps an upward tendency of the source from 304.7 in 2017 to 318.6 in 2018. Meanwhile, The categories that account for the highest
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 of money spent in both 2017 and 2018 are salary. The buildings and transport remain the fixed
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 in both two years. Technology has increased from 2017 to 2018. It can be seen from the pie chart that salary took up about 69% in 2018. The
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 increase in technology is the same as the
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 decrease in salary, which is 6
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. The table gives information about sources, which the most is the national government about 177.8m in 2018. The following small date is other sources about 38.5%. The local taxes resource is 102.3m, which is ranked number two.
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