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In your view, what is the most important thing for governments to spend money on: education, health, transportation, or something else? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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There are numerous priorities of society and the
government
 needs to balance all perspectives.
Nevertheless
, spending a lot of resources never to solve all problems,
as well as
 the quality of public
services
 is negative in some countries. In accordance with my perception, most
people
 believe that the
government
 may provide everything,
however
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 it is not true, and considering that the
government
 gains money through taxes, paid for by the population, the advantages and disadvantages may be
considerate
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. In my opinion,
the
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public resources have been used in essential
services
,
such
 as health and basic education, because
it
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they
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 provide egalitarian opportunities for the population independently of social classes. It is possible to generate more qualifications for
people
 and prepare them for some situations, and
consequently
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 satisfaction on quality work-life, considering no spending with healthcare a long of your life and possibilities to qualify in the future.
Moreover
,
the
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other
services
 may be provided
for
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 private companies, being of high quality, and
people
 may decide
to
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whether to
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 contract these
services
 or not.
On the other hand
, the disadvantages need to be balanced for the
government
, considering that resources are limited. All
services
 provided by the public institution used taxes,
therefore
 a dialogue is necessary for deciding if an increase
on
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 taxes is
a
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 correct policy for
the
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society. At the same time, there is a negative reputation
about
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for
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 public
services
, and
consequently
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 the spending can be no effective. In conclusion, it is difficult to decide which
services
 are
priority
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a priority
the priority
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, because there are some situations and decisions that are considerate for
people
 and managers of the
government
.
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