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In your view, what is the most important thing for governments to spend money on: education, health, transportation, or something else? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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There are numerous priorities of society and the
government
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 needs to balance all perspectives.
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, spending a lot of resources never to solve all problems,
as well as
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 the quality of public
services
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 is negative in some countries. In accordance with my perception, most
people
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 believe that the
government
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 may provide everything,
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however
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 it is not true, and considering that the
government
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 gains money through taxes, paid for by the population, the advantages and disadvantages may be
considerate
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. In my opinion,
the
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public resources have been used in essential
services
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,
such
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 as health and basic education, because
it
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they
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 provide egalitarian opportunities for the population independently of social classes. It is possible to generate more qualifications for
people
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 and prepare them for some situations, and
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consequently
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 satisfaction on quality work-life, considering no spending with healthcare a long of your life and possibilities to qualify in the future.
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,
the
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other
services
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 may be provided
for
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 private companies, being of high quality, and
people
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 may decide
to
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 contract these
services
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 or not.
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, the disadvantages need to be balanced for the
government
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, considering that resources are limited. All
services
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 provided by the public institution used taxes,
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 a dialogue is necessary for deciding if an increase
on
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 taxes is
a
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the
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 correct policy for
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society. At the same time, there is a negative reputation
about
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for
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 public
services
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, and
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consequently
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 the spending can be no effective. In conclusion, it is difficult to decide which
services
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 are
priority
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a priority
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, because there are some situations and decisions that are considerate for
people
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 and managers of the
government
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocation of resources
  • socioeconomic development
  • innovation
  • public health
  • infrastructure
  • sustainable practices
  • conservation
  • equality
  • trade
  • emergency preparedness
  • safety nets
  • mitigating
  • critical thinking
  • outbreaks
  • workforce
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