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Which one is better buy expensive clothes or cheep clothes

#clothes #cheep
In
this
 day and age, more and more people are spending a large amount of
money
 on high price
clothes
. Some people argue that
this
 is a good thing
,
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 and that it is a waste of
money
 to buy a large number of cheaper garments. On the whole, I disagree with
this
 view.
To begin
 with, there are several reasons to buy cheaper
clothes
 than expensive
clothes
.  First of all, I would like to use my
money
 on something else
such
 as food, donation, and
to
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buy gifts for my parents etc. Another reason is that luxurious
clothes
are overprice
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. When I was in my twenties, I used to buy expensive
clothes
 but
it
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they
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last
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long
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a long
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. And
also
 it doesn't mean better quality.
Lastly
, if I buy expensive
clothes
, I 
only
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 allowed
to buy
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 a few
clothes
 because I can not afford
it
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them
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.
However
, if I use my
money
 on inexpensive
clothes
, I am able to buy a lot of garments. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, personally, I think it is better to buy many inexpensive
clothes
 than luxurious
clothes
.
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