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In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. This has adverse effects on families, individuals and the society. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion

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Food
 is a principal need in human life. Some people believe that it is better to have international
junk
food
 rather than countries' specific
meals
,
while
 others claim replacing fast
food
 with countries' own cuisine has a negative impact on families, individuals and society itself. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter. I feel
this
 way for a number of reasons, which I am going to illustrate in the following paragraphs. First and foremost, having
junk
meals
 will harm family gatherings. In most countries, families gather on Sunday to have their traditional
meals
. If they have snack
food
instead
 of traditional cuisine,
this
 ceremony will lose its meaning.
For example
, in my family, we always gather to have our traditional meal “plov” on Sundays. All the family members come on
this
 day to have it and
this
 is like a ceremony for us. Once we replaced it with other international
meals
such
 as a pizza, but in the end, no one was satisfied with the meal and most of them went earlier at home. Everyone can eat
junk
food
 on their own, but classic
meals
 should be a must for family gatherings.
Last
 but not least, new generations will not know the way of cooking traditional
meals
, if they are replaced with
junk
 foods. Everyone learns anything by practising. If no one in the family cooks traditional
meals
, their kids will not know about the meal and the way of cooking them. My nephew’s experience is a compelling example of
this
. When my nephew was nine years old, no one in his family cooked our traditional
meals
. He mostly ordered the
meals
, since his parents worked all day.
Hence
 he only had our local
meals
 on Sundays when he came to his grandparents. He had no idea how to cook our local foods and I think if new generations do not value our traditional
food
,
this
 will affect negatively our society. All in all, I definitely think that international
junk
meals
 should not be replaced with local foods, since it has an adverse impact on families, individuals and societies.
This
 is because traditional
meals
 are a must in family gatherings, and new generations will not value our traditional
meals
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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