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In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. This has adverse effects on families, individuals and the society. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion

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Food
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 is a principal need in human life. Some people believe that it is better to have international
junk
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food
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 rather than countries' specific
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 others claim replacing fast
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 with countries' own cuisine has a negative impact on families, individuals and society itself. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the latter. I feel
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 way for a number of reasons, which I am going to illustrate in the following paragraphs. First and foremost, having
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meals
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 will harm family gatherings. In most countries, families gather on Sunday to have their traditional
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. If they have snack
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 of traditional cuisine,
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 ceremony will lose its meaning.
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, in my family, we always gather to have our traditional meal “plov” on Sundays. All the family members come on
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 day to have it and
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 is like a ceremony for us. Once we replaced it with other international
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 as a pizza, but in the end, no one was satisfied with the meal and most of them went earlier at home. Everyone can eat
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food
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 on their own, but classic
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 should be a must for family gatherings.
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 but not least, new generations will not know the way of cooking traditional
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, if they are replaced with
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 foods. Everyone learns anything by practising. If no one in the family cooks traditional
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, their kids will not know about the meal and the way of cooking them. My nephew’s experience is a compelling example of
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. When my nephew was nine years old, no one in his family cooked our traditional
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. He mostly ordered the
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, since his parents worked all day.
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 he only had our local
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 on Sundays when he came to his grandparents. He had no idea how to cook our local foods and I think if new generations do not value our traditional
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,
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 will affect negatively our society. All in all, I definitely think that international
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meals
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 should not be replaced with local foods, since it has an adverse impact on families, individuals and societies.
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 is because traditional
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 are a must in family gatherings, and new generations will not value our traditional
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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