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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information in proportion about illiteracy rates of
males
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 and
females
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 in some countries for the past year.
Overall
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,
females
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 are more than
males
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 in the region and
large
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a large
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number
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 of
females
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was
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were
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 in South
Asia
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. In
a
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developed countries, the
number
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 of
males
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 was around 1 per
cent
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. In the Caribbean of Latin America, the
males
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'
rate
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 was more than the other developed country which was 10 per
cent
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.
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, in Oceania of East
Asia
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, it was almost 9 Percent. In Sub-Saharan Africa, the proportion of men was double that in Latin America which was 30 per
cent
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. In the Arab states, there was only 1 per
cent
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 lower than in Sub-Saharan Africa. South
Asia
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 had the highest
rate
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 of gents when compared to the other regions which were around 34 per
cent
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.
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, the case of
a
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apply
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number
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 of
females
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 in the developed country had almost 2 per
cent
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. In the Caribbean, the
number
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 of women was around 11 per
cent
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. In Oceania, it was more than 9 Percent of the Caribbean, which was 20 per
cent
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. In Sub-Saharan Africa, the
rate
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 of ladies was almost half of the graph, which was around 49 per
cent
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. In Arab states and South
Asia
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, the calculated
rate
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 of women was almost 53 per
cent
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 and 54 per
cent
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 respectively

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females, number, asia, cent, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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