The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.
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The table provides data on the number of new
students
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at one university in England in three different years.
It is clear that
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the number of enrolled
students
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increased significantly from 1937 to 2017 (from 327 to more than 6250). The figure for people who came from within 40 miles of Manchester dipped roughly from more than half in the first year to less than one-fifth in 1967 and to approximately 2 per
cent
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at the end
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. On the other side, the percentage of foreign
students
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surged more than 3 times (from less than one-tenth in 1937 to almost one-third in the final year). Probing
further
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, the number of studying women and men fluctuated. There was a slight decrease in the proportion of the female in 1967 (35 per
cent
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of the total),
however
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, the figure improved during the next 50 years, to 55 per
cent
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,
while
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the percentage of the male reached a peak in 1967 (65 per
cent
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) and dropped by 20 %
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.
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, the total of
students
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at Manchester University shew an upward trend,
while
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the proportion of locals plunged.
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