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Band 6.5

You bought a ticket for a music concert. You’re unable to attend the concert. You want to offer the ticket to your friend. Write a letter to give him the ticket. In your letter, Give detailed information about the concert Explain why you’re unable to attend the concert Tell him how to get the ticket

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Dear Constantine, Guess what ! Merlin Manson will soon come to our city. The concert starts at 8pm on the
central park
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Central Park
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 embankment on Saturday night. The organisers promise fireworks, lots of beer and lots of rock. Just the way we like it. The tickets are expensive, but I have some good news, I have
two
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 tickets to
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 concert.
Iwas
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I was
 lucky to win them at the
last
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 beer festival in Berlin. The winner was supposed to drink
two
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liters
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litres
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 of beer and eat
two
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 big burgers in
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 minutes and I was the fastest. So, I’d like to invite you to join the event. We'll reminisce about our cool childhood years. Remember, we were his fans and used to listen to all his songs. Oh, that was a great time. I promise it'll be fun and I hope to see you there. I look forward to hearing from you. Best wishes, Vlad

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You've done well in providing information about the concert and your inability to attend. However, you forgot to include how your friend can get the ticket. Be sure to mention the means of transferring the ticket, such as delivering it personally or sending it via mail.
single idea per paragraph
While you’ve maintained a friendly tone and have structured your letter with clear paragraphs, ensure each paragraph contains a single idea. Also, consider slightly expanding your explanation about why you can’t attend for better clarity.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are nicely done, maintaining a friendly and conversational tone, which is appropriate for writing to a friend.
suitable writing tone
You've successfully captured the reader's interest by including details about the concert and sharing a personal story about how you won the tickets.
logical structure
The letter is logically structured overall, beginning with the announcement of the concert and moving through to the invitation and personal memories.
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