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Nowadays some older people choose to live in the retirement communities with other people, rather than living with their adult children. Is it a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays an increasing population of senior citizens are going to
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resident
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 in Care homes with other aged ones
instead
 of living alongside their
children
.I strongly believe that
this
 development does more good than harm. It is true that both older
parents
 and their
children
 who live
toghther
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together
 seem to be in a much closer relationship.
This
 is because
children
 could know about their
parents
 better by talking about their daily experiences and sharing their feelings
while
 having
the
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meals together. At the same time, family
members
 could help the elderly ones to do a lot of things which are seemingly tough
to
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 them.
For example
,
children
 could teach their
parents
 how to use mobile phones and shop online,
as well as
 help the elderly carry some heavy boxes or fill difficult tables.
However
, there are two reasons why I strongly believe retirement communities provide a more professional service for senior citizens.
Firstly
, nurses in Care homes are better trained than family
members
, the elderly could take
daily
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examination
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 with the help of nurses and get instant medical care when they feel uncomfortable.
Secondly
, busy adults who have full-time jobs have less contact with their
parents
, which makes the elderly feel lonely at home,
by contrast
, in retirement communities, the elderly could meet a lot of friends at the same age and play together,
for instance
, they can play chess, hold a mini concert, dance with music and so on. These activities are good for elderly people's both mental and physical health. In conclusion,
while
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there is no doubt that caring for elderly people was traditionally the responsibility of
adults
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 family
members
. living in
retitrement
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retirement
 communities is an unstoppable trend which is
benefical
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beneficial
 to both the elderly and the family
members
.
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