The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. summearise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

summearise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts provide
an information
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about changes in
a
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the
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number
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of households with electrical appliances and
amount
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the amount
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of time
contributing
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for
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housework per week, over a hundred-year period between 1919 and 2019. Looking over the charts, a few main trends turn out to be clear.
Firstly
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, the
number
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of electrical devices in our houses shows
steady
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upward trend. Meanwhile, the
number
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of hours of housework continuously drops. A more detailed look at the first chart reveals that the most rapid raise was fixed for refrigerators. It has
boosted
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since 1920
,
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and has taken its own place in each house to 1980 already.
As well as
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refrigerators, vacuum cleaners became well-spread in households during the
last
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century.
However
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, the latter had
more
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a more
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stable increase and achieve 100% of appearance only
to
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2000. Washing machine seems to be less popular or less available for
middle-class
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the middle-class
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arguably. The percentage of
this
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device
were slightly fluctuated
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slightly fluctuated
fluctuated
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from 60% to 70% through the period between
40s
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the 40s
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and 90s, but after
that
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the figure has been slowly rising since 2000. In terms of
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number
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a number
the number
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of hours of housework per week, it is significantly falling. Following the data
is
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above, we could make an assumption that
this
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downward trend will continue
due to
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total
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the total
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increase
of
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in
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usage
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the usage
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of electrical devices in households.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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