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IN SOME COUNTRIES, MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ARE BECOMING INTERESTED IN FINDING OUT ABOUT THE HISTORY OF THE HOUSE OR BUILDING THEY LINE IN. WHAT ARE THE REASONS FOR THIS? HOW CAN PEOPLE RESEARCH THIS?

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One day, everybody figures out himself as a part of a family with their own biography including a genealogical tree,
history
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the history
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 of the country and the state or even the
house
 or building where they have been living from generation to generation. The
last
 point become more popular nowadays and is worth to be observed in detail.
To begin
 with,
currently
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 it’s quite uncommon to live in one
house
 for decades.
Due to
this
, it will turn more curious to look for historical facts connected with your family nest and ancestors if they historically live in the same
place
.
For example
, in the movie “Addams Family” their
house
 greatly reflects the lifestyle and
history
 of their weird family and makes the characters more self-confident in my opinion.
However
, it’s not mandatory to live somewhere long in order to have an interest in
history
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the history
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 of the
place
 where you live. Being a stranger
first
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 time, people try to get acquainted closer with
new
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the new
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place
 where they are going to live for a
while
. It helps to integrate
in
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into
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 a new society. Fortunately, the wide range of sources providing significant historical information, makes
such
 investigation faster and more pleasant.
For instance
, each middle city is used to have a kind of national museum performing exhibitions about the
history
 of the
place
 and
also
 about buildings. In case of absence
such
museum
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a museum
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, anybody has an access to the Internet, which provides
a
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plenty of information about everything. It’ll just
taking
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take
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 time to look over numerous websites carefully and sort necessary sources talked about your
house
. Arguably,
such
 easy access to the information has served as one more reason
of
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for
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high
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the high
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 level of
interesting
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interest
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 in finding out about
history
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the history
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 of houses.
Nevertheless
, the growth of
popularity
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the popularity
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 of buildings’
history
 among people seems to be
positive
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a positive
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 trend. For
some
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,some
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 it’s an important part of
family’s
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the family’s
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 biography, for others – the way to become part of a new society after moving. Anyway, I strongly believe that it fuels the growth of the level of culture and of human values.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
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