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It has been suggested that primary school children should be taught how to grow vegetables and keep animals. To what extent the advantages outweigh its disadvantages.

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It's been a contention of what should we teach to our school grader
children
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 whether to do
vegetable
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 gardening or engage in animal care. I would argue that both are essential for the growth and development of our growing
children
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 since doing gardening can develop basic skills
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 keeping
animals
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 hone a
child
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's emotional quotient. Introducing basic knowledge of
vegetable
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 growing to our school graders helps them develop important basic skills; being patient, responsible, and caring which are crucial in
children
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's social, emotional and cognitive development. School programs,
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 as gardening are done in a group, together they will cultivate the soil before planting a seed and nourish it daily with water until it grows.
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 process is all done in a patient manner, consistent and with love in order to produce food on the table without
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 the
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 plant will die.
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,
children
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 will be more encouraged to do
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 type of activity with other
children
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 as well,
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 improving their socialization skills. On the other hand, keeping
animals
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 at home will develop
children
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's emotional quotient towards
animals
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. Having a pet at home,
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, a dog(which has loving-natured) will boost their emotions of
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 for the animal,
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, it does not limit only to one animal but to the general population as observed.
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, a
child
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 that exposes to
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 type of environment usually has a loving, caring and responsible upbringing. Giving them an edge over other
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 who are not exposed.
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 to childs' ,safety some
animals
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 are not safe to care for, albeit there's always an option like choosing only those small
animals
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 and safe for the
child
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. In conclusion, I am of a balanced opinion as both have plausible advantages, compared to their disadvantages for safety issues. I would argue that learning
vegetable
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 gardening and animal keeping is vital for a
child
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's growth and development.

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