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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to orwork in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reason s why someoneshould learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #reason #language #travel #orwork #country #someoneshould
Learning a new
language
 is the topic of discussion.
Although
 some think that by
traveling
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travelling
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 and working
in
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abroad, they can learn
language
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the language
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, others, myself included, believe that there are a lot of paths to
learn
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learning
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 a new tongue. The first reason is that
people
 can
enroll
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 in
language
institute
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 because in
this
 way they can learn the basic lessons easily.
For example
, there is
a
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 English school called Safir and there are different levels for
people
 with different English knowledge. So, individuals can improve and gain new
language
 by
sign
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signing
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 in a class.
Moreover
, the second one is about
to make
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making
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 a situation about the
language
 that interest to. Due
in
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,in
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this
 case, they try to speak and act
like
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in
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 the
language
 they want.
For instance
, a person can
asks
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 their friends, siblings and colleagues to talk English and they can do their daily routines in other languages which is not their mother tongue.
Hence
, making a situation like a foreign country can develop the
language
. Some may argue that there is one way to learn
new
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a new
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language
 and
that is
 about working and
traveling
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travelling
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 out of the mother country because they think in
this
 case
people
 force to speak to do their tasks every day and
also
environment
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the environment
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 makes individuals
to
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apply
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learn it.
However
,
people
 can speak
in
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other
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another language
other languages
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language
 in their nation and
encourage
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this encourage
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people
 to learn
it
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apply
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to
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too
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.
Furthermore
, these days
environment
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the environment
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 is so jealous and when someone
see
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sees
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 someone
speak
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speaking
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 in
different
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a different
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language
, they like to learn it too. To sum it up, in my point of view, there are a lot of ways to gain a new
language
such
 as joining a new
language
 school and
also
 bringing a foreign situation
to
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into
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 your daily
life style
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lifestyle
show examples
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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