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Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than have free higher education provided by the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#students #cost #university #studies #education
The prestigious
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 colleges have always been very expensive. Making
this
 a situation between the younger people. Many families do not have the economic resources to pay for their children's education, so they need to go to a
lower
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level
college
. The United States has decided to solve
this
 problem by giving
student
 loans,
this
 means that
the
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students
 can start paying their tuition by the time they start working. There are two opinions on
this
 problem, the first one is that
the
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student
 loans are not helping
the
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students
, they are jeopardizing them. Because when the
student
 gets out of
college
 the debt they will have is nearly half a million dollars, so they will be in debt many times. The other position recommends lowering the price of tuition so everyone can compete for a place. The facts are that many families are very concerned about
this
 situation
,
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 because their kids are not getting the education they deserve because of their economic resources. The director of
Columbia´s
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 University has stated that their tuition is expensive because of the
level
 of education they are bestowing.
On the other
hand
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 some
high
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level
students
 can not reach their full potential because of the economic resources
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society has imposed on them. In
conclusion
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 the people that are going to
a
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college
 have to discuss with their families
about
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the decision they will be making
,
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 because some colleges are not available for the family. So the
students
 have two options: either ask for a
student
 loan
,
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 or go to a
lower
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lower-level
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level
college
.
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